Vivek Koshy

Poem · 2010-07-06

Untitled III

Meet to forget. To be done with, the pride; which belonged ago. You wont bow; but die with, not a dog to view. Barks the loudest crow. Look the silent grave stands. A moment ago, the raven stayed; stayed, for the third knock. Love the womb, shouldnt we? The pain, the cat moans; its vast pains, to well know the vacant reply. The cream of the sky builds up. Why the repeating theatre- will you flow? The burns hurt; and the pain thwarts the revenge of love. The raven leaves. The mystery is told. The uninvited has, looked to the exhausted. Why drown the future for the past? The dreams seen today, wont last the 'morrow. The time now is shaking. The thoughts of yesterday; doesnt hold the performed acts. You live, you survive; the dog doesnt notice. To hate the tend-err, is one; to spit another. Others day shows; the light through the prisms. But presently, beyond the red, what can come? Look for the joy in the beggar, The life in the egg. But not the fumes of my soul.

© 2013 Vivek Koshy

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Ice QueenJen

Wow, this is much deeper than the other two. Yet I still love the way you write, full of meaning, yet obscure in a way. Its funny how some things we see in life, really have no meaning like when you say " the dog doesnt notice."- He just exists from day to day. But we as human beings strive to stay alive and survive in what condition we are in. Great poem also! Although I think you either mispelled the word revenge, putting a d instead of an e, or if you meant the d to be there- you should put an apostrophe in.

16 Years Ago

wordman

the mystery is told the life in the egg this is really deep my friend the pride the womb you painted a vivid picture here

12 Years Ago

and_if_all

My favorite out of the series. Each stanza seems to go from strength to strength. Particularly like the line 'Why drown the future for the past?' simple but speaks volumes.

15 Years Ago

Tasha

This was so strong Meet to forget. To be done with, the pride; which belonged ago. You wont bow; but die with, not a dog to view. This was my favorite out of the series. :)

15 Years Ago

Undying Glory

i have to agree, this seems to be the climax to the other two. your stanzas are longer and that really added more meaning to this one, kudos for that! this was really thought-provoking, more so than the others! this series sure reminded me of Metallica's songs "The Unforgiven", "The Unforgiven II" and "The Unforgiven III". very well done!

15 Years Ago

Helen Crutchett

Vivek, you write with convincing clarity....soulful yet full of the pace of life. Wonderful read, much enjoyed!

15 Years Ago

Sabista Khan

I really like this one from the other two in the series. It is very difficult to explain why...

15 Years Ago

nono

Interesting it seems to me that your relating certain things...Like remember old days are painful....Truly an interesting read!

16 Years Ago

DamienHino

I like how it started off "Look for the joy in the beggar, The life in the egg. But not the fumes of my soul." also how it finished good write!

16 Years Ago